tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post8136574107576598151..comments2023-05-17T10:29:21.805-04:00Comments on Lesser Apricots: The 99th PagePerrihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08485133856416996635noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-3960408854441855482011-01-30T21:40:31.656-05:002011-01-30T21:40:31.656-05:00I would definitely turn to page 100! Seems like th...I would definitely turn to page 100! Seems like there's a lot of internal conflict with Zorro. Nice job. Also, thanks for commenting on my page 99! :)Racquel Henryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12878474658503690859noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-8730223149750325332011-01-30T20:17:14.137-05:002011-01-30T20:17:14.137-05:00Wonderful, wonderful voice. Totally pulls you in.
...Wonderful, wonderful voice. Totally pulls you in.<br />I loved especially the paragraph with the "green Fiat of fate" and the line "Even now, he couldn’t bear to look at that album cover… or make of car, for that matter." That mix of funny and poignant is wonderful.<br /><br />I think you worked in the backstory very deftly here--and the book's middle is a good place to add backstories, especially if they're interspersed within real-time scenes.Laurel Garverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-77566113669432634382011-01-29T19:06:50.390-05:002011-01-29T19:06:50.390-05:00Thanks, everyone, for all the feedback!
I enjoye...Thanks, everyone, for all the feedback! <br /><br />I enjoyed reading all those pages, too. <br /><br />You all make me so happy :)Perrihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08485133856416996635noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-58420755228214592992011-01-29T16:53:11.115-05:002011-01-29T16:53:11.115-05:00I'm also a huge fan of the Fiat line. Well don...I'm also a huge fan of the Fiat line. Well done!Jennifer Hoffinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07616744694563644199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-79141865078343690272011-01-29T09:52:41.671-05:002011-01-29T09:52:41.671-05:00Strong voice and nicely written.
I'd turn the...Strong voice and nicely written.<br /><br />I'd turn the page.<br /><br /><br />MichaelMichael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-89086664979594563222011-01-28T22:46:03.569-05:002011-01-28T22:46:03.569-05:00I love this. You have a wonderful voice. It stands...I love this. You have a wonderful voice. It stands out.Angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12399082789777816445noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-20828392396141527492011-01-28T22:14:18.812-05:002011-01-28T22:14:18.812-05:00Wow that was cool...really good imagery, loved the...Wow that was cool...really good imagery, loved the imaginary scene because you could totally picture it!Red Boot Pearlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03015990875361952510noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-88660930289753914412011-01-28T21:44:06.642-05:002011-01-28T21:44:06.642-05:00ZOMG, I just laughed out loud. (Alicia will testif...ZOMG, I just laughed out loud. (Alicia will testify to this.) "The green Fiat of Fate"--I want that on a t-shirt!<br /><br />Yes, I would so read the next page. Great black humor--the album title alone... (And his next album should be The Green Fiat of Fate.)<br /><br />That's it, I want a Green Fiat of Fate.Empresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10895649061017410443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-46107931389075173062011-01-28T21:26:39.640-05:002011-01-28T21:26:39.640-05:00Yes! Yes! Yes!Yes! Yes! Yes!marywhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03710811109864517539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-24361160315748750542011-01-28T19:18:17.706-05:002011-01-28T19:18:17.706-05:001. Would you turn to page 100? Yes
2. Why or why n...1. Would you turn to page 100? Yes<br />2. Why or why not? Because I'm fairly certain your guy is cool at least in Dawn's eyes. :)<br />3. Based on what you read, how likely would you buy the book? I would.<br /><br />Keep going!<br /><br />Marie, http://marierearden.blogspot.comMarie Reardenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13653459061863869033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-14961321232786262772011-01-28T19:11:54.421-05:002011-01-28T19:11:54.421-05:00Oooh...can I have page 100 now? Matter of fact, pa...Oooh...can I have page 100 now? Matter of fact, pages 1-98 and the rest??? This is soooo good. This is my kind of writing.Marquita Hockadayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15931541485018513281noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-2189302640806829842011-01-28T17:46:37.973-05:002011-01-28T17:46:37.973-05:00I love the Abbey Road line and this, "After t...I love the Abbey Road line and this, "After the glory that was Hate you (Gonna Eat Cheese)..."<br /><br />You have a great voice in this piece. Good humor, even about sad topics. I'd definitely be reading more. There have been some great pieces today, but I like yours best.Carolinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17889762915886434493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-55779391473628020332011-01-28T17:46:10.928-05:002011-01-28T17:46:10.928-05:00I liked the imagery! Of course, I know NOTHING abo...I liked the imagery! Of course, I know NOTHING about the book - no genre, no description (I know it's on the sidebar, but since I didn't know it for the other entries, I didn't read it yet), no anything but this page. <br /><br />My only concern about the backstory is why it's happening on page 99. I think by then, you'd be hard-core into the story line. But maybe you are and I just don't know it yet!!! Fun entry.<br />ericaerica and christyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13074820593371226159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-10220017512095145012011-01-28T15:59:12.173-05:002011-01-28T15:59:12.173-05:00The voice has potential. I have a hard time with c...The voice has potential. I have a hard time with certain characters' names and Zorro is going to have a single picture in my mind. That may affect how I would consider buying a book or reading more. Good entry for the blogfest.Dawn Embershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00214560861614476799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-51496663778048615852011-01-28T15:27:40.016-05:002011-01-28T15:27:40.016-05:00Hi,
LOL. Loved "creamed by the green Fiat of...Hi,<br /><br />LOL. Loved "creamed by the green Fiat of fate."<br /><br />Would so read on! ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-12700801867366745492011-01-28T15:03:48.441-05:002011-01-28T15:03:48.441-05:00I agree that the back story definitley isn't i...I agree that the back story definitley isn't info-dumpy. It adds to the character, it brings the voice alive even more. This sounds like it could be a great emotional read. I'd love to see more ^_^Loralie Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07134452749240292803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-91662961322705189132011-01-28T13:13:11.244-05:002011-01-28T13:13:11.244-05:00dude-- loved it. The back story didn't feel li...dude-- loved it. The back story didn't feel like info dump to me. It felt like an old guy being introspective. And the 1-hit wonder song name is so perfectly awesome. It so captures the one-hit-ness of it all.KatOwens: Insect Collectorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12228171304170449979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-37100516648545878312011-01-28T13:00:55.317-05:002011-01-28T13:00:55.317-05:00Count me in as another who really liked the green ...Count me in as another who really liked the green Fiat of fate. Nice work!Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15981159884498574786noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-68452239763615410522011-01-28T12:50:47.626-05:002011-01-28T12:50:47.626-05:00Nothing wrong with a bit of backstory. This was a ...Nothing wrong with a bit of backstory. This was a pleasure to read, and I certainly want to read on to find out what his motivation is :)Alex Mullarkyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12385523523229124157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-32838652823783357712011-01-28T12:11:47.084-05:002011-01-28T12:11:47.084-05:00Your voice and style come through and we definitel...Your voice and style come through and we definitely want to know "what's up".Wendy Tyler Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10841984342368861282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-26675732671572966192011-01-28T10:38:45.074-05:002011-01-28T10:38:45.074-05:00I would certainly turn the page. Thanks for sharin...I would certainly turn the page. Thanks for sharing.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-24624713376712646822011-01-28T10:23:01.289-05:002011-01-28T10:23:01.289-05:00And this is why I <3 your writing. "Green ...And this is why I <3 your writing. "Green Fiat of fate." I would so read on. Actually, I have to read this. RIGHT. NOW.Alicia Gregoirehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06660125614529633284noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-65051044003198783272011-01-28T10:17:36.842-05:002011-01-28T10:17:36.842-05:00Ummm, MORE PLEASE!! :) I'm not even being poli...Ummm, MORE PLEASE!! :) I'm not even being polite--this is definitely my kind or reading. I'd snatch this up in a bookstore in a sec!Pam Harrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09872183610393667619noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-218371432584554432011-01-28T10:06:36.153-05:002011-01-28T10:06:36.153-05:00"as fate would have it, Willy put out his fir..."as fate would have it, Willy put out his first solo hit and bit the big one all in the same week."<br /><br />"green fiat of fate"<br /><br />I love these lines. I would definitely keep reading, I really like Zorro's voice. And there are definitely questions that I want answered.Mohttp://mowrite.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7909060729155750527.post-50211464790152120062011-01-28T09:45:45.014-05:002011-01-28T09:45:45.014-05:00I love the voice. Excellent. I'd keep readin...I love the voice. Excellent. I'd keep reading. :)Holly Hillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07901177289663629475noreply@blogger.com